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English Presentation을 수강하며 5개의 단락으로 구성된 Essay를 지금까지 두 번을 써서 검사를 맡았다. 자랑이라면 자랑이겠지만, 검사를 맡으며 지적당한 것 중에 문장의 구성이나 흐름이 이상하다거나, 문장을 표현할 때 단어를 잘못 선택했다거나 등의 오류는 거의 지적당하지 않은 것 같다. 주로 관사나, 단수복수의 오류만 몇개 지적당했는데, 그런 것을 틀렸다고 해서 외국사람이 의미를 잘못 이해한다거나, 이해하지 못한다고 생각하지는 않는다.
Sean선생님이 내가 쓴 에세이를 훑어보더니 관사 빼먹은 것, 단수 복수 일치하지 않는 것 3~4개 정도 고쳐주더니 excellent! 라고 칭찬했을 때 나름 보람을 느꼈다 -_-ㅋㅋ

애초에 에세이를 쓸 때, 관사나 단수 복수 표현 혹은 시제의 일치에도 물론 신경을 쓴다고 썼지만 내가 가장 신경을 쓴 부분은 자연스러운 표현이었다. 다시말해 단순히 우리말을 직역하여 영어로 써서 원어민이 당최 무슨 말인지 이해할 수 없는 그런 문장을 쓰지 않는 것을 목표로 삼았다. 그게 확실히 효과를 본 것 같다.

그리고 동사를 쓸 때, 단순히 동사 하나만 쓰는 것이 아니라, 동사 + 명사의 표현을 많이 쓰려고 노력하였다. 실제로 예전에 어디선가 동사 + 명사의 표현이 동사1개로 표현하는 것보다 훨씬 자연스러운 표현이라고 들은적이 있기 때문이다. 예를들어 decide대신 make a decision을 쓴다거나, look대신에 take a look 것 말이다.

그리고 어려운 단어보다는 예문 검색을 통해 가장 많이 쓰이면서도 쉬운 단어를 많이 쓰려고 하였다. 이유는 간단하다. 왜냐? 내 어휘실력이 아주 보잘 것 없고, 어려운 단어가 많이 들어가면 나중에 외워서 발표할 때 막힐지도 모른다는 생각때문이었다. Speech를 평가할 때, Body Language, Volume, Eye Contact, Pitch(Intonation)를 잘해야 하는데, 이걸 하려면 당근 Essay를 줄줄이 외우는 것은 기본인데, 사실 외우는게 제일 힘들다. 고로 외우기 쉬우면서도 어색하지 않는 표현을 쓰려고 하였다.

두 번째 Essay 그리고 발표가 끝났다. 마지막 까지 별 탈없이 잘 해야 될텐데..

Can you imagine that teachers and students speak only in English in all classes in Korean public school? I object to the plan ‘English-only classes in public schools’ because not all Koreans need to speak English fluently, the plan will bring about the jump of private education expenses, and besides it will weaken our national consciousness and pride as Koreans.

How many jobs are there which require the ability of speaking English here in Korea? For example, does a bus driver need to speak English when he's working in a bus? How about an engineer? It's enough to read English books or have a simple conversation ability. I think it's more effective to teach some students concentratedly who really need to speak English very fluently than to teach all students. The president and new government should take cognizance of the concept about selection and concentration.

What would happen if 'English-only classes in public schools' comes true? The answer is obvious. Students would have to hear and speak English well in order to understand what a teacher teaches in English, and parents would spend more money on their children's private education. This is not a hypothesis but a reality in Malaysia in which the plan has been working since 2002 and parents suffer from high expanses on private education.

Korean is the one of the most advanced languages in the world which many linguists demonstrate the superiority. In other words, we must be aware of the rights and obligations to take pride in our language, Korean. In addition, a language is an important factor that reflects our thoughts and culture and if the plan comes into reality, young and naive students would probably lose their national consciousness. The government should know that a language is the one of the strongest defense systems that keeps us from losing our identity.

I'm not saying English is not important in Korea. However, What I'm saying is that the plan of 'English only classes in public schools' lacks planning and consideration. My opinion is that we should select and concentrate on people who really have to speak English, the plan would not solve the high education expenses problem but make it worse, and Korean is such an important weapon and shield in the culture war that we have to protect it. The government should think deeply and reconsider this ironic and stupid plan.

영어 프리젠테이션에서 발표할 것. 일단 5개의 paragraph로 된 글을 쓰고, 원어민 선생님한테 보여주고 검사받고 다음주 목요일날 싸그리 외워서 발표를 해야한다.

원어민 선생님이 제시한 에세이 스타일은 다음과 같다.

• 자신에게 중요하거나, 의미가 있는 물건을 사람들에게 show and tell 방식으로 presentation할 것.
• 5개의 문단(Paragraph)로 하여 Intruduction(1), Body(3), Conclusion(1) 로 구성할 것.
• Introduction의 첫 번째 문장은 Attention Grabber(or Motivator)로 할 것
• Intruduction에는 반드시 thesis(주제문)과 그를 뒷받침하는 3개의 outline문장으로 구성될 것.
• 3개의 outline 문장은 3개의 body paragraph와 연관이 되어야함. 즉 각각의 paragraph와 연계가 되어야 함.
• 가급적이면 emotional한 단어나 표현을 많이 구사할 것.
• 문단과 문단, 문장과 문장의 연결 흐름(transition)을 부드럽게 할 것
• concluding paragraph에는 thesis를 재강조하고, 3개의 body paragraph의 내용을 요약하되 이전에 썼던 표현이나 단어와 다르게 할 것(이게 제일 힘들었음. -_-; 나의 부족한 보카실력이란 ...)

몇몇 학생의 에세이는 그야말로 싸그리 난도질 당하기도 했지만, 내가 쓴건 그나마 난도질을 덜 당한거 같아 나름 뿌듯하다. 그런데 외울 생각을 하니 하늘이 노랗다. -_-

English Essay

Make your lips glossy and sexy and you’ll be kissed! I got this lip moisturizer December 30th 2006 from my girl friend. This is one of the most meaningful things to me because it keeps my lips healthy, it’s the first thing I received from my girl friend, and it reminds me of times my girl friend and I started to love each other.

Lip is an important part of our face. By the way, when the weather is dry and cold, lips are not only parched but also bleed. Lip moisturizer can protect lips from getting dry and bleeding. Moreover after you put on lip moisturizer, your lips become glossy and healthy and your girl/boy friend may perhaps feel you’re so sexy that he/she wants to kiss you.

In 2006 winter, while my girl friend and I were enjoying some cocktails and chatting in a bar, suddenly she took something out from her bag and gave it to me, and told me “Happy New Year.” The present was this lip moisturizer. The first gift is very emotional to me as much as first love, first kiss, and so on. This is the first thing I’ve got from my girl friend.

Seeing this lip moisturizer I recall that my girl friend and I fell in love each other. When I could not be sure whether she loved me as much as I do her, I was encouraged by the presentation, lip moisturizer. Finally I proposed to her to be my girl friend, and then she became my girl. And besides When I kissed her in Ilsan Lake park I was wearing this moisturizer. Our love started and continues with this lip moisturizer.

I will never forget this lip moisturizer, and always keep it seriously. My lips looked sexy due to this lip moisturizer, This is the first present from my only girl, and this is the starting point of my love. Although this lip moisturizer ran out, instead my happy memory is going to last forever in my mind.